Hah, the Bob scene is quite popular for something I didn't actually intend to write, it just sort of worked its way in there!

Ohh, concrit is love. Is it anything you can put your finger on for the dialogue or just a general feeling? (I get horribly tangled up writing dialogue for sex scenes, this is the slightly-less-sounding-like-a-porn-script-version :-D)

Thanks very much for commenting!